So many good things in there, I'm really down with what you have to say! I think the emphasis on families and young people is not only really important for the long-term health of our sport (and children!) but is also something that resonates with many in the O community.
The first four paragraphs would be enough for me, but you do have a lot of experiences and qualifications that may appeal to a wide variety of people.
I think it's a great statement. You are superbly qualified, and your platform is something I totally agree with. The only minor nitpick is to not use the phrasing "touched 300 children."