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Here's my latest - you're welcome to borrow. My editing comments in color.
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FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE
Instead of a pre-release
ROCHESTER ORIENTEERING CLUB HOSTS MENDON PONDS PARK EVENT
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Rochester, N.Y., May 7, 2011: The Rochester Orienteering Club will host the second of the season’s orienteering meets on Saturday, May 7th, 2011 at Mendon Ponds Park starting at the Cavalry Lodge. Participants will be given maps of the park with key locations noted. They must “punch in” at each of those locations in turn, and race to the finish. Separate courses will challenge participants in different age and skill groups with ribbons for winners. All ages and skill levels are welcome.
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This event also counts as the second in the club’s Championship Series. Points from this and five additional races held throughout the year will determine a Club Series Champion in October. The best four results over the six races will count, allowing for participants to miss an event or improve upon an earlier result.
I mention the club championships to show that there is actual racing involved...
The event begins at 12 noon, and with staggered-starts, all competitors must punch in at the starter’s table by 2:00 pm. Competitors will have no more than 2 hours to complete their course. Distances vary from 1.5km to 7km based on difficulty.
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Instruction leading to a beginner course will be available, and walking such a course can easily be accomplished in under an hour (but please plan to arrive early). Groups and families welcome. Cost: $6 per entry (groups count as 1 entry).
Recommended dress: Appropriate for walking, running, or off-trail movement within individual capabilities. Long sleeves and nylon sweat pants can provide protection if participants plan to leave the trail. A compass would be helpful, and the club has some to loan if needed. Given the potential for inclement weather, please be aware that this event will take place rain or shine - or even snow, though we certainly hope we don't have to deal with that.
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About the Rochester Orienteering Club:
The Rochester Orienteering Club is a not for profit that organizes orienteering events in the Greater Rochester, N.Y., Region. It holds two events per month during the spring, summer, and fall, and organizes several ski-orienteering events each winter. For more information:
http://roc.us.orienteering.org
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Steven Tylock
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I send this 3 weeks before an event to a small group of email addresses I've collected from the local news, daily, and alternative weekly press. Too early and they don't care, too late and they can't do anything.
We picked up coverage of the event in the form of "things to do" for each event in 2010 (I believe - if not all, most), and were featured one week and pulled the reported for an in-depth article.
Best of luck with it.